[ontoiop-forum] Final stab at proofreading - sections 1 and 4 (was Proofreading chapter 7)

[Till Mossakowski]

Many thanks, Terry.

I have incorporated most of your comments and closed the issue.

I have not incorporated the change of
"DOL is a language for distributed knowledge representation, system 
specification and model-driven development across multiple OMS, 
particularly OMS that have been formalized in different OMS languages."
into
"DOL is a tool for managing and manipulating distributed knowledge 
representations, system specifications, and model-driven 
design/development artifacts among multiple OMS, particularly...'',
because, I think DOL is not a tool, but a language. Hence, also 
"manipulating" does not fit.

Best, Till

Am 17.05.2015 um 18:35 schrieb terry.longstreth:
> Dear Till
> I've completed my review of Sections 1 and 4 and attached a PDF with 
> the pertinent annotation.
> I also reviewed Section 8 but found no significant editorial issues.
>
> If you run out of time for incorporating them, none of these would be 
> critical to an OMG review, but we could save them for later discussions.
>
> Regards,
> Terry
>
> On 5/15/2015 5:38 PM, Till Mossakowski wrote:
>> Dear Terry,
>>
>> many thanks indeed!
>> I have revised the document accordingly.
>>
>> Best, Till
>>
>> Am 15.05.2015 um 07:27 schrieb terry.longstreth:
>>>
>>> I've annotated the attached copy of the PDF (Chapter 7 only ) with 
>>> several editorial comments/suggestions.   I'm still working on the 
>>> other 4 sections (in the previous days version), but since we've 
>>> been over them several times, it seemed best to tackle this one first.
>>>
>>> Terry
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On 5/13/2015 5:39 AM, Till Mossakowski wrote:
>>>> Dear all,
>>>>
>>>> I just have substantially revised chapter 7. So if you plan to read 
>>>> it, please download the latest version at:
>>>> https://github.com/tillmo/DOL
>>>>
>>>> All the best,
>>>> Till
>>>>
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